an explanation

I posted a new version of my poem-in-progress, which is not something I usually do. What I typically do is post a working draft I'm reasonably happy with and twiddle and tweak it without saying anything about the twiddles n tweaks. But I did quite a bit of tweaking on it today, so I decided to repost it altogether and undo some of the tweaks (the ones I could remember, as I'm bad about keeping drafts) in the previous post. So if you're curious to see a bit of step-by-step in my revision process, you now can, you lucky ducks.